User talk:Cyu2/sandbox
Hey Cyu2,
Overall I think your page looks pretty good! You may want to explain what the word "cusps" mean or either provide a link for it in case a reader does not understand the term. Under the category possible prevention, I think you meant to say "any" instead of "and", if not then you may want to rephrase the sentence. Also, you may want to add a little more to the recent research category if you are able to find a current study being conducted.Jmorris15 (talk) 08:57, 12 November 2015 (UTC)
- History: Most of what you put in here isn't really history. Why not just delete this heading and include in the abstract?
- Several copy editing issues. Just make sure you really go over everything to make sure it's clear, grammatical and makes sense.
- If you're just going to repeat everything in stages in diagnosis, leave out the subheading, (and the other subheading) and just have one mechanisms section.
- In mechanism, talk about how it causes the problems it does cause (I know they're minor, but still).
- You list filing it down under prevention, but that sounds more like treatment.
- Don't use subheadings unless they add something. You have a lot of extra subheadings that create small divisions.
- What research? Tell us about the research that has been done in the past 10 years, don't just tell us that it happened.
- This is looking really good! For a rough draft, I'm very happy with it. The overall structure and informationare very strong.