User talk:Seltek/sandbox

I will be on for next couple hours if you are posting your draft. Mine is already up on my sandbox if you get a chance. Jeremiah Student1040 (talk) 06:18, 22 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

Hi! Overall I like the content and good job expanding on what wasn't in the wiki page! But first of all, there are several subject verb disagreements and other small errors, such as:

1) I think there needs to be a period after breeding in the first line.

2) "some practice (but very rare) this system" sounds very awkward, especially with the part in the parentheses. Maybe move the parentheses somewhere else or rephrase the sentence.

3) "This parenting system eventually aids in increasing their survival rate and reproductive success as a whole." slightly unclear. Who's 'their'? In the previous sentence you were talking about a person, and someone else's offspring, which are both singular nouns.

4) "Even though kin selection does not benefits individuals who invest in relatives’ offspring," benefits should be singular.

Great job overall, be sure to use the cite tool for your sources so the formatting is correct and it references your sources to the correct tags! Ryukiri 1 (talk) 19:28, 25 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for the feedback. I have updated my article. Seltek (talk) 22:54, 28 November 2018 (UTC) Selamawit T.[reply]