User talk:TrittonSlayer/sandbox

Clarity: - What I notice is that needs to be more clarity in your history because some sentences (the two scientists/physicists & more) aren't fluent due to incomplete sentence structure (missing commas or combining two ideas into one sentence without the right transition). - Not only that, there were a couple of grammar mistakes on occasion usually due to spelling (container without the -er in your second sentence in history) or missing words. - I also notice that there were lots of instances where you put more spaces than usual. - Perhaps you can link manometers & fluent flow to other wiki articles, so that I can investigate futher into what those two words/phases mean. - For "fluent flow" can you explain more into why it matters in your topic.

Neutrality: - No comments - I did not read anything in your article that expresses an opinion or an exaggeration.

Sourcing: - You have included a reference page and wiki links to some important key terms, where other readers might want to investigate more into. - However, there is a problem with your third source. You did not give enough information for the reader to investigate your third source. Perhaps included an author and a link to the pdf on the Leybold booklet or instructions to get to it.

Biography: 1. Atta, C.M. Van (1965). Vacuum Science and Engineering. New York: McGraw-Hill. p. 303. - Source: book - Author: C.M. Van Atta - Credentials: He has many years of experiences from teaching and/or research at MIT to UC Lawrence Radiation Laboratory at Berkeley, CA.

2. pdf - Source: Scientific Journal Report - Author: Niels Marquardt - Credentials: Scientist and Professor at the Institute for Accelerator Physics and Synchrotron Radiation at the University of Dortmund in Dortmund, Germany

3. Vacuum Technology. Hydraulics & Pneumatics. 2017. pp. 83–86. - Source: Book - Author: (Reviewer) Dr. Walter Umrath - Credibility: PhD degree in some science degree in the United Kingdom (perhaphs in Germany since the company Leybold is in Germany)

Peer Review - Alex Anderson

1. Author of the book is credible through many years of experiences by teaching and researching at various laboratories and colleges from the east coast (MIT) to the west coast to out own local UC Berkeley laboratory.

2. The author of the scientific journal is a Professor and researcher from the University of Dortmund in Dortmund, Germany.

3. No information can be found about the author, much less finding the source itself. — Preceding unsigned comment added by PNguyen3357 (talk • contribs) 22:29, 19 April 2018 (UTC)